Hello fellow viewers, I have finished a piece of writing today so I would like to show you it. In this piece of writing I had to add:
- Interesting sentence starters
- Descriptive words
- Dialogue
- Onomatopoeia
I hope you enjoy!
Writing will start here: Tik tok, tik tok, time was running out! There was only a matter of minutes before I would be turned into a ghost for the rest of my life. I need those orks to come back with the spellbook quickly because there is only 30 minutes left! Maybe I could try opening that door over there. It might be an exit? Anxiously, I crept to the door and yanked it open! Then shut it firmly and locked it. It was a whole new dimension with dead leaves scattered across the ground. Slowly, I strided with big steps and what I saw was a little crow with a golden key perched on a clock reading: 4:18 PM. Maybe that is the key to the next dimension! I chased it and chased it. I had been chasing it all day. But, the crow didn’t drop the key. I thought for a while. I suppose it’s impossible for me to get the key. Since the crow has the power of flying. I waited until it was late and the clock struck midnight. When the time came I slowly crept to the dozing crow and cautiously took the golden key and put it in my pocket. Suddenly, A door appeared! I think it was for this key? Carefully, I inserted the mysterious key into the lock and opened the door….
Suddenly, I found myself standing on water. RUMBLE! Up came three weapons. A sword, an axe, and a spear “Which will you choose?” said a weird voice. Anxiously, I took the spear hoping that I made the right decision. Then a big wave came splashing at me and when I opened my eyes there was a kraken! I saw a health bar pop up above it’s head. It read: 5/5. “May the battle commence!” shouted the weird voice. WAIT! But I don't even know what to do! Oh, Now I get it! I have to hit that kraken five times! I hit it...1 time, 2 times, 3 times, 4 times, and on the last shot I took a big breath and threw it as hard as I could and boom! It exploded and vanished out of my sight. “You have proved yourself to me well, You shall live your life as is” After that I embarked on a journey across the ocean. Hoping to find civilization. [the end]
Sorry the blog post was pretty long. If you have any suggestions of changes to my story please tell me in the comment section bellow. Have you made a story longer than mine?
BYE~! BLOG YA LATER!!!! ๐๐
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ReplyDeleteHi Kaito.
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing because of the whole story but the part that I like the most is this part. "There was only a matter of minutes before I would be turned into a ghost for the rest of my life."
That is my favorite part.
Hi Kaito
ReplyDeleteMy name is Yahya from RM 23
I like how you started with Tik Tok that made the story very interesting to read. If you you can make the story bigger that will be nice.
๐BLOG YA LATER๐
Kia Ora Kaito.
ReplyDeleteKahvel here from room 23๐. I really like your story and I'm amazed of how long it is. I don't think I have ever made a longer story than this!
Maybe next time whatever your writing about put the sentence under the picture so that we know ok๐.
How long did this take you and why did you decide to make it this long?
Kahvel๐๐.
Hi Kahvel, Thanks for commenting in my blog! It took me about 3 days since there was a beginning middle and end. The beginning was based on the first picture (The forbidden tower) and so on.
DeleteI wasn't really thinking that it would be this long. Just that I had to write a lot to combine the beginning and middle since they are like 2 completely different story. Its like I had to merge them all together to make this one piece of writing.
I hope you learned something!
BYE~!๐๐